Can someone please tell me if this sounds right?

i have to do a report on a poem called daffodils but i have to rewrite the poem in my own words but i ran into a problem i dont know if this one line sounds right i rewrote the poem already but here is where is my problem is

I WANDERED lonely as a cloud

That floats on high o'er vales and hills,

When all at once I saw a crowd,

A host, of golden daffodils;

Beside the lake, beneath the trees,

Fluttering and dancing in the breeze





i wrote it like this



i wandered as lonely as a cloud

thats high as a kite

when all at once i saw a crowd

---a bunch of daffodils---

near the lake and under the trees

swaying in the wind



in the line a host of golden daffodils i dont know how to make it sound right for a presentation

does anyone have any ideas or should i leave it as it is



any help would be great



thanks

Can someone please tell me if this sounds right?
i was walking around by myself

like a cloud that is stoned (high as a kite)

when i said, "life's an eskimo pie --

let's take a bite!"



I saw a group of people

Colorful and doing what they do

Not a care in the world

Spineless, without backbone, kind of like you.



This way it kind of rhymes.
Reply:I drifted like a lonely leaf

blowing over the hills and through the streams

i drifted by a large gathering

a gathering of fresh daffodils

beside the stream at the bottom of the hill

freely moving in the breeze



different words, but the same meaning. don't know if you'll like it or not, but i tried for ya
Reply:Instead oh a "bunch of golden daffodils" You can say " an array of daffodils, golden in the sun"
Reply:A host, of SUNNY daffodils?



I'm not sure.

My brain's a little fried at the moment.

Hope I was of help, and best of luck on the presentation!
Reply:Your only rearranging the words... not really putting it into your own words.
Reply:the lines are the same if u turn that in ull be PLAGERIZING!!!!