It sounds silly, but that's because hate does not belong in it. Did I walk the thin line?

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Friends don’t let friends cry alone

by TD Euwaite



I want to sit and hold your hand

Until the afternoon

With sun and rain and robin’s eggs

Daffodils in bloom



I want to hear you let it out

I want to feel your pain

I want to beat the callus cur

That’s treated you this way



As we sit and drink it in

Your heart will slowly mend

And if I see that dog again

He’ll not be man’s best friend



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It sounds silly, but that's because hate does not belong in it. Did I walk the thin line?
There is no silly here.

While comforting, you are allowed to feel distaste for the person who seems to have defeated a true friend.

I personally think the line is very thick between hate and the numerous words people should use instead of it.



Morning TD
Reply:Do the mojito....but, work, work, work!



Biloxir would chase that cur away!!!!
Reply:Beautiful. I've also been comforted here by my real virtual friends. (And that's not at all oxymoronic).
Reply:You're a good friend. It is not silly.
Reply:Thank you so much.I am really very much depressed right now.Very much sad.Thanks a lot,it really mean to me a lot
Reply:Well, if you did, (teeter a tad) you walked it well.
Reply:Maybe the answer I gave you yesterday is even more appropriate: a poem is brilliant when the readers think it is about them...
Reply:Uhm, I have a slight critique of your poem TD

The second line: "Until the afternoon " sounds clunky

How about: " Until the 'noon" instead

But otherwise I really like your poem



Yours,

Harry
Reply:Friends dont let friends...? A mongrel curse be on you for your wicked twist from tear to zeal. Think of all reaching for kleenex boxes and then perplexed. lol
Reply:it's nice TD..........sweet and simple and hence so beautiful!
Reply:I don't think it is silly. Actually, I find it quite sweet and sentimental and loving. We all need friends who are willing to hold and listen to us when we are feeling low. It's a lovely poem.



Have I taken this poem too seriously? I just assumed the dog/cur was a metaphor.



Let's hope so...It's bad enough that I have to wear this silly face, but the pout is ultra annoying.
Reply:It's not silly ....I think it's quite good



You may have walked down Lombard Street ............( The Crookedest street in America, San Francisco,California ) a couple of times



And you did not slip%26amp; fall ..........

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