Can someone please tell me if this sounds right for my report?

i have a report to do on a poem called daffodils but one of the things i have to do is rewrite a poem in my own words and i ran into problems with two lines here is how the where my problem is



The waves beside them danced; but they

Out-did the sparkling waves in glee:

A poet could not but be gay,

In such a jocund company:

I gazed--and gazed--but little thought

What wealth the show to me had brought



and i wrote it like this



---the waters had waves but the the daffodils---

---were much prettier---

a poet could not be happier

with such cheerful company

i looked but didnt think

how much joy the sight brought me



the problem i have is with the first two lines that say The waves beside them danced; but they Out-did the sparkling waves in glee: does it sound right or do i need to redo it



the only clue my teacher gave me was to make all the lines sound simple.



any help would be great



thanks

Can someone please tell me if this sounds right for my report?
REVISED( do you need to consider meter and rhyme as well?)



The waves next door waltzed, but the daffodils were into salsa

I was as happy as a tick on hound dog.

Little did I know that the sight would pay off like a lottery ticket.
Reply:i think you should change the phrase "Out-do" because it sounds childish. make sure you capture the meaning of the poem, and not just use different words.
Reply:maybe the waves and daffodils are having a competition, and the poet is judging them.

haha

and he is glad he picked that one