What is your opinion of this poem?

The Cornfield



In the malaise

Of a rudely setting sun

Your tungststen shield

Transparent and over-run

Quiet on quixotic passes

Through thick thickets

Of Pine. oak, and fern

Black forest

Black magic gift

Those tiny daffodils

Lying tranquilly abound

In the soft yellow countryside

Follow me tonight;

Down that dim path

Of pitiful moonlight

Our frenetic hearts

Will be blazed

By neon sparks

What is your opinion of this poem?
Containing grievous errors such as use of the words quixotic, and tungsten (as evidenced by the butchery of its spelling), the line "Black magic gift", and an entire lack of direction or purpose, this poem rests in the bosom of refuse, along with its companions.
Reply:You have a gift of excellent alliteration...a lot of writers don't practice that. But, a free verse poem can sound like a rythming poem when good alliteration is there...internal rythme works just as well.

I'll give you a 10 for this one! Da_n good work, and the message is self-contained, not sprawling all over the place!
Reply:I think it's a very good poem...



I might have adjusted it a little...



"Lying tranquilly abound

Down that dim path

Follow me tonight;

In the soft yellow countryside

by pitiful moonlight"



...very nice poem how it is, though.
Reply:i dont know. i found this really boring. you stuck a bunch of romantic adjectives together and called in poetry.

i'm guessing you could do much better than this.
Reply:wow. i like it. i really like the " by neon sparks" part. veryy good poem
Reply:You have defeated a tricky task with this noble performance.
Reply:i like the part where it says "by neon sparks" its very good.