Heres another poem i wrote. Please rate.:)?

Transition

Caterpiller, Catnapping, Caught in cocoon

Silently sleeping, seeking sunlight sky

Awake, aware, and avowing at atomphere

Last leaving his lodging, little larva leaps

spreading his lodging wing, sailing to skillfully

Wandering with wonder of the whirling worthy

Lost amid light lilies, he lies

illuminated in Indigo, imagination stirs

Dreams of dancing delightfully in daffodils

Heres another poem i wrote. Please rate.:)?
This is stunning alliteration. I do believe I quite fancy this, and wish to be lost with our friend the caterpillar. I'm a little confused at the random capitalization, but I'm sure you had meaning for it. Thanks for this little jaunt into a sweet, innocent, creative mind.
Reply:Great alliteration!
Reply:I think it's pretty good.

Nice work:)
Reply:wow beautiful! On a scale from 1 to 10 i give it a 10!
Reply:Nice alliteration, but the "spreading his lodging wing" line doesn't fit. It jars the reader. It's a very well-crafted poem, but I do think that one line needs to be re-written to maintain the same level of alliteration.
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